Once upon a time there was a Eel name James he was living in a wonderful place that was could the Oamaru creek he lived with his mum and dad and he had lots and lots of cousins.James mum yelled out “ James do you want to go to school tomorrow” said James mother and James said yes so the next morning James woke up and his face was so excited because he always want to go to school and meet some of the kids.When James got to school he met a friend named Rex.Rex was a very kind person because he gives some eels lunch when James was at class his mum called because there was some mean people that chucked rubbish in the water and when James herd his mum he asked his teacher Mrs Ellen. Mrs Ellen said yes you may go and as soon as James rushed at home he saw the Oamaru creek got destroyed and it got polluted and he have to find another place to live so they don't die and get sick.When they have to look for a place they got sick and it took a million of years to find a wonderful place to live and when James and his family were looking for a new place they found a new place and they lived happily ever after.
I like how you've got an orientation, problem and a solution Rowana. I enjoyed reading how they lived happily ever after. Remember to use speech marks to show there is talking in your narrative.
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